Writing a statement

Probably one of the most difficult things was to create a statement for all group. In a first few weeks none of my group members started to write one, so I even though I am a foreign student and English is my second language I tried to write one. It didn't end up very well.

That is what I written:

For this project we stepped out of the light and in to the dark side to show the unknown, the mystery of nightlife. We tried to reconnect to the physical world in ways that are often lost in the hectic pace of daily routines. At night, life moves from lively streets to homes and nightclubs. The sunlight is replaced by the moonlight, city street lamps, small lights from never sleeping people’s homes.

I put that onto our group chat and asked someone to read it and change it. Natalie offered to help and that is what she written:

For this project we stepped out of the light and in to the dark side to present the unknown and the mystery of nightlife. We tried to reconnect to the physical world in ways that are often lost within the hectic hours amidst daily routines. At night, life moves from lively streets, homes and often nightclubs. The sunlight is replaced by moonlight, street lamps and lights illuminating from people's homes.

But it still needed to be changed a bit, so that is the second one from Natalie:

For our collaborative project, we decided to step out of the light and into the dark to show the unknown, and the mysteries of nightlife. We are reconnecting to the physical world in ways that are often lost during the daytime. In daylight, traffic is busy, homes are almost empty and nightclubs are silent, but when it hits night time, traffic becomes quiet, homes become filled with people and nightclubs become populated. The places which are quiet during the day simply come to life at night. We will be exploring the different aspects of night life and produce work that is personal and how we interpret life itself and night and what it involves.

However in this one she was repeating herself too much so we made it shorter and it looked like that:

For our collaborative project, we decided to step out of the light and into the dark to show the unknown, and the mysteries of nightlife. We are reconnecting to the physical world in ways that are often lost during the daytime. In daylight, homes are almost empty and nightclubs are silent, but when it hits night time these places come to life. We will be exploring the different aspects of night life and produce work that is personal and how we interpret life itself and night and what it involves.

And at the very end it was changed again, because it still didn't sound the way the university student statement should sound. So I received some help from other group member Joe Gregory, who helped me to change the grammar and tweaked it a little. And it is my groups final statement that will go onto wall in the venue:

For our collaborative project, we have stepped out of the light and into the darkness to illustrate the unknown and the mysteries of nightlife. Once the sun goes down we are connected to the physical world in ways that are lost during the day. Where once our ancestors were restricted by firelight we are now tethered to the world by a connection of artificial lights, be it at home, night club, or street light. The work that is on display is a personal exploration of the different aspects of nightlife.